BEAT 'EM UP

[alexmach1]

yes, the contrast of the eyes and the glass is better

[Medevenx]

Sorry but still not reading it. You had to tell me what it is before I can say myself what that is.

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

then what do you suggest i do to make it more readable?

[Previous]

Either make them have visible frames or make them all white. Those thin lines with only little contrast to her skin tone you have now are hardly visible.

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

i'm kind of worried that this whole limited-palette thing is going to bite me in the ass eventually. oh well, i tried, anyway.

right now, i'm not personally satisfied with the look of the spectacles, but i can't make them all white because they're right up against the eyes and the eyes are white. it'd just be a big blob of indistinguishable white.

[alexmach1]

even if it sucks, at least i can die knowing i helped a little.

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

those spectacles look a hell of a lot better, but i can't say i like what you did with the eyes. i want her eyes to be mostly closed, to give her a sort of "sly" or "devious" look.


how's this for a compromise?

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

first post updated again, this time with a story synopsis! for your convenience, it's also right here.

WARNING: CONTAINS ABSOLUTELY NO SPOILERS ABOUT THE STORY (Click to View)

-STORY-
THE YEAR IS 2XXX.
CRAPPY AND GATSBY, AN ODD DUO
OF PLUMBER AND CRAB, ARE
ENJOYING A PEACEFUL RETREAT IN
THE OUTSKIRTS OF VERA CITY.
JUST WHEN EVERYTHING SEEMS
FINE, THE TWO SPOT RED SMOKE
RISING FROM THEIR BUSTLING CITY.

UPON THEIR RETURN, THEY
DISCOVER THAT VERA CITY HAS
BEEN TAKEN OVER BY A MYSTERIOUS
"MR. Z!" WHEN CRAPPY AND GATSBY
MAKE THEIR WAY TO THEIR
APARTMENT, THEY DISCOVER
GATSBY'S LITTLE BROTHER, LAMMY,
TO HAVE BEEN KIDNAPPED!

WITH THE POLICE FORCE
CORRUPTED BY MR. Z'S RULE,
CRAPPY AND GATSBY HAVE NO OTHER
OPTION BUT TO TAKE THE LAW INTO
THEIR OWN HANDS. THEY RECRUIT
THE HELP OF THEIR CLOSEST FRIENDS;
TYLER, A CARTOONISH MAN MADE OF
RUBBER; AMBER, AN AMBITIOUS
WRITER; STEVO, A HALF-CYBERNETIC
WRESTLER; AND LOAF, A SLOTH
WITH A TRAFFIC CONE ON HIS HEAD.

TOGETHER, THEY TAKE TO THE
STREETS TO SAVE VERA CITY AND
LAMMY FROM MR. Z'S EVIL GRASP.

[Gorsalami]

this is it


I'm ready to kick faces

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

and then i made this



and NOBODY will know what it's for

(except gors, hehe)

[ShadeDBZ]

I knew it!
Gors is secretly Mr. Z!

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

okay i'm done, back to working on amber...

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

MY TOE MY TOE

[Mighty Jetters]

I thought you were working on Amber?
Unless... she stole Crappy's clothes!!!
And... mustache...

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

because why not